tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post1174769010914631863..comments2023-04-03T06:16:16.077-07:00Comments on Expressions of Talking Leaves: Write On Edge: Victor/Victoria ChallengeShelton Keys Dunninghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-49722440047788964972012-06-09T12:33:17.282-07:002012-06-09T12:33:17.282-07:00I was being sneaky :)
Guy or Gal, I'm leaving...I was being sneaky :)<br /><br />Guy or Gal, I'm leaving that up to you. You can read Victor or Victoria as you see fit.<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-20880099762179212922012-06-09T05:04:53.203-07:002012-06-09T05:04:53.203-07:00Hmmm...how did I miss this one? I am still trying ...Hmmm...how did I miss this one? I am still trying to figure out if it was a guy or girl.Waterfallhttp://www.waterfallmind.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-55901734858414661502012-06-04T13:02:47.608-07:002012-06-04T13:02:47.608-07:00Thanks for the love!
Getting inside a character&...Thanks for the love! <br /><br />Getting inside a character's mind certainly makes the writing easier and the end result more satisfying.<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-27399178964664023642012-06-04T12:27:31.047-07:002012-06-04T12:27:31.047-07:00I loved this. Truly. It was such a unique take on ...I loved this. Truly. It was such a unique take on the prompt and filled with details that were gender neutral yet descriptive of the person. And maybe that's what we should strive for...getting inside the character's head, whether male or female or puppy.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-9830639988312330392012-06-02T11:01:19.601-07:002012-06-02T11:01:19.601-07:00Thanks! If I don't stretch, I can't grow r...Thanks! If I don't stretch, I can't grow right? <br /><br />It's a quirk I have, speaking to the animals in their native tongue. I mew at cats and moo at cows. I haven't come up with a good way of speaking with turtles yet. Anyway it seemed like the perfect quirk for the character and I'm tickled it worked!<br /><br />Thanks as always for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-55716778563793013762012-06-02T05:38:29.524-07:002012-06-02T05:38:29.524-07:00This was a fantastic initiative. I love that you s...This was a fantastic initiative. I love that you stretched yourself beyond the prompt, talk about the spirit of the exercise!<br /><br />I think the piece itself is lovely, the details and internal monologue transcend gender and give a very clear picture of who the narrator is, how they live, and what their priorities are. Favorite detail: greeting the fowl in their "native tongue."<br /><br />What a pleasure to read.Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407917830307384493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-30856004257196261252012-06-01T19:39:41.785-07:002012-06-01T19:39:41.785-07:00Thanks for the love! I'm thrilled the scene wo...Thanks for the love! I'm thrilled the scene worked. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-42928201422347500132012-06-01T19:38:41.412-07:002012-06-01T19:38:41.412-07:00Blushing. Thanks for stopping by! I'm thrilled...Blushing. Thanks for stopping by! I'm thrilled you enjoyed your stay and you're always welcome to return. Thanks for sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-36598257670665921982012-06-01T19:36:25.338-07:002012-06-01T19:36:25.338-07:00Thanks! I'm thrilled you enjoyed your stay. Yo...Thanks! I'm thrilled you enjoyed your stay. You're always welcome here. Thanks for sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-84404014298091489322012-06-01T19:35:26.933-07:002012-06-01T19:35:26.933-07:00Thanks! I'm thrilled you stopped by and shared...Thanks! I'm thrilled you stopped by and shared your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-62840249395392879312012-06-01T18:04:36.026-07:002012-06-01T18:04:36.026-07:00Great idea! I agree with Wisper that I was gettin...Great idea! I agree with Wisper that I was getting a female vibe from the thought flow. I absolutely <br />Loved the imagery. I was so there in the scene!MelissaThinkshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08200544173390668722noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-7989221521792584412012-06-01T17:29:15.670-07:002012-06-01T17:29:15.670-07:00I always enjoy reading your pieces. You just have...I always enjoy reading your pieces. You just have great talent and can wear many writing hats. And it is true, "there is nothing more magical than the scent of brewed coffee, except perhaps that of griddled bacon"! I can smell it now!~Juliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15630711945679604201noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-65795148295913843372012-06-01T16:36:02.697-07:002012-06-01T16:36:02.697-07:00I'm going to guess your narrator is female. So...I'm going to guess your narrator is female. Some of the comments just don't seem appropriate for a man, but all of them could come from a woman :)<br /><br />A lovely piece. I always enjoy your submissionsCarriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03472645003197467754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-68378779545228353732012-06-01T14:57:16.699-07:002012-06-01T14:57:16.699-07:00I think you hit gender-neutral right on the nose. ...I think you hit gender-neutral right on the nose. Once I thought, hmm, woman? Another time I thought hmm, man? I especially liked the personification of the door. Perfect.Kathleen Basihttp://www.kathleenbasi.com/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-31904879659693021052012-06-01T12:11:23.757-07:002012-06-01T12:11:23.757-07:00Yea! Adventure! Have you noticed how your voice ch...Yea! Adventure! Have you noticed how your voice changes when switching to a different perspective? Like it's you, but not? For me, it's like wearing different skin. <br /><br />Of course I never said I was normal.<br /><br />My husband uses "travel mug" all the time. Probably just to distinguish from the myriad of other coffee dispensers that migrate to his truck. I lose a mug a week...<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-24056069981756127352012-06-01T12:05:16.520-07:002012-06-01T12:05:16.520-07:00I'm glad the scene worked. Thanks for sharing ...I'm glad the scene worked. Thanks for sharing your thoughts! I hope you enjoyed your stay!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-71788244943282736982012-06-01T11:52:41.735-07:002012-06-01T11:52:41.735-07:00I'm currently writing a short story. It's ...I'm currently writing a short story. It's my first real foray into the first person, and it's been an interesting adventure.<br /><br />I think you did a great job here. For some reason I feel like it's a women. Something about the term "my travel mug". (And why that would possibly make a difference? I don't know.)angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14974137283220034062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-35830954312186186722012-06-01T11:31:44.560-07:002012-06-01T11:31:44.560-07:00Great take on the prompt - I read your piece and h...Great take on the prompt - I read your piece and have to agree is gender neutral, as loving coffee or bacon, or greasing doors are neither male nor female inherently.<br /><br />Cool take on the prompt. <br /><br />-barbara @ de rebus<br />www(dot)barbaragildea(dot)comBarbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05481035784237871634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-45013851455270371142012-06-01T10:48:05.804-07:002012-06-01T10:48:05.804-07:00Thanks!
I thought of all the times my kin were up...Thanks!<br /><br />I thought of all the times my kin were up before dawn cracked on their farmsteads, and I just know I could never accomplish that in my world regularly without coffee. It seemed a natural progression.<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-53871179103199137812012-06-01T10:43:34.631-07:002012-06-01T10:43:34.631-07:00Thanks!
When my husband is manic, he thinks like ...Thanks!<br /><br />When my husband is manic, he thinks like this. I can tell because one moment he'll say he loves me, and then he'll follow up with a random "I need a new biscuit pan"<br /><br />We laugh a lot.<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-49741816453300864872012-06-01T10:36:14.965-07:002012-06-01T10:36:14.965-07:00Thanks!
I'm not a huge gravy fan, I'm wei...Thanks!<br /><br />I'm not a huge gravy fan, I'm weird that way. But I come from good, self-respecting mid-westerners so I understand that gravy is a must. One of my favorite memories was explaining to a co-worker what that wonderful white sauce was made of. I thought she was joking that she had never even seen a biscuit and gravy.<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-32948488998337421942012-06-01T10:28:35.780-07:002012-06-01T10:28:35.780-07:00Thanks!
I'm such a night owl that I rarely wa...Thanks!<br /><br />I'm such a night owl that I rarely watch sunrises, so for me a sunrise is a treat. A torturous treat, but still a treat. <br /><br />I agree with you observation. It's what I've seen growing up and working with a bunch of guys.<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-52715520075967798842012-06-01T10:20:23.282-07:002012-06-01T10:20:23.282-07:00I could smell the coffee and now I'm hungry fr...I could smell the coffee and now I'm hungry from all the bacon and biscuit imagery. Great first person, which for me is sometimes difficult.Ginahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04841767868797265391noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-58051417678539676962012-06-01T07:09:00.952-07:002012-06-01T07:09:00.952-07:00I would say, based on the way the thought process ...I would say, based on the way the thought process jumps around, this is a female protag. But I love the male overtones that cast that conclusion into some doubt. Either way, your first person POV worked well as this is a beautiful piece. I hear what you mean about writing first person, I tend to do little of it as well.dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-44862856055758550862012-06-01T06:37:18.542-07:002012-06-01T06:37:18.542-07:00Yes. Biscuits must always come with gravy. It...Yes. Biscuits must always come with gravy. It's required. <br /><br />I like that you challenge yourself to stretch your writing. I think that you did a great job of 1st person, and you left the details ambiguous enough to allow the reader to decide gender. I read the passage twice, and I could see your character as both male and female.TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.com