tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post1541177751193247902..comments2023-04-03T06:16:16.077-07:00Comments on Expressions of Talking Leaves: Write On Edge: Location, Location ChallengeShelton Keys Dunninghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-82402675175495765862012-05-30T13:59:49.683-07:002012-05-30T13:59:49.683-07:00Thanks for the love! I had fun with it myself. Tha...Thanks for the love! I had fun with it myself. That line is certainly a kicker, it says what I need it to say but I can't seem to get the voice right on it. Oh well.<br /><br />Thanks as always for stopping by and for sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-35469710628962290682012-05-29T19:50:10.238-07:002012-05-29T19:50:10.238-07:00I absolutely love the twist of writing this from a...I absolutely love the twist of writing this from an animal's persepective. I had to re-read the first paragraph before I caught that. My suggestion for this sentence "She let him alone then, able as she was to get into trouble of her own accord." would be maybe to break it up into 2 sentences - something like "She let him alone then. She was capable of getting into trouble all on her own." Not sure what that'd do to the word count but would smooth out that part some... Just a thought. I must say again, though, I loved this piece!dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-31360225110280523362012-05-28T00:06:24.591-07:002012-05-28T00:06:24.591-07:00Thanks for the love! It was my first "animal&...Thanks for the love! It was my first "animal" perspective so I'm thrilled it turned out as well as it did. Thanks for stopping by and I'm happy you enjoyed your stay!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-10815757817430873712012-05-28T00:05:20.917-07:002012-05-28T00:05:20.917-07:00Thanks!
I'm thrilled you enjoyed your visit. ...Thanks!<br /><br />I'm thrilled you enjoyed your visit. Thanks for the love!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-71636244538422292642012-05-27T05:34:09.778-07:002012-05-27T05:34:09.778-07:00Wonderful! You really capture the animal POV so we...Wonderful! You really capture the animal POV so well. Loved this!VictoriaKPhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07987993161693042703noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-61431357274903876882012-05-27T05:01:11.081-07:002012-05-27T05:01:11.081-07:00Dittos to the above...I loved realizing they were ...Dittos to the above...I loved realizing they were dogs 3/4 of the way through. Although the dug hole should have told me much earlier. I was wondering why there was no reference to digging tool. :)Kathleen Basihttp://www.kathleenbasi.com/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-5223709625966100562012-05-26T11:20:24.029-07:002012-05-26T11:20:24.029-07:00Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed your stay. Thanks...Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed your stay. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-80449992338973508242012-05-26T11:19:22.961-07:002012-05-26T11:19:22.961-07:00That was cute. I also thought they were kids at fi...That was cute. I also thought they were kids at first. That first line was amazing too.Patricia JLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17582005500429122486noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-15948472038543251902012-05-26T10:07:14.529-07:002012-05-26T10:07:14.529-07:00Gotchya! Sorry, just teasing. I was intentionally ...Gotchya! Sorry, just teasing. I was intentionally vague about it mostly so I'd push myself to see the scene through Dixie's eyes instead of producing "just a dog" story. <br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-87530225564758559892012-05-26T09:45:30.116-07:002012-05-26T09:45:30.116-07:00I thought they were two kids until I read the last...I thought they were two kids until I read the last paragraph. :)Cathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02955986438119957833noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-10195027301504335572012-05-26T09:03:26.955-07:002012-05-26T09:03:26.955-07:00Thanks! Labs are by far my faves, but as puppies g...Thanks! Labs are by far my faves, but as puppies go I think hands down the cutest thing I ever saw was a basset hound trying to outrun his dumbo ears with his already adult-sized paws. He couldn't get three strides without standing on top of his ears and pinning himself to the ground. <br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and for the love!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-23850834911257364902012-05-26T08:58:16.749-07:002012-05-26T08:58:16.749-07:00Thanks! It was a first for me (at least as far as ...Thanks! It was a first for me (at least as far as I can remember) so I'm thrilled I was able to carry it off. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-47167899365536373462012-05-26T08:57:09.343-07:002012-05-26T08:57:09.343-07:00Thanks for stopping by! Each time we hit the mall,...Thanks for stopping by! Each time we hit the mall, I drag my hubby to the pet store to "go play with the puppies". I could watch them for hours. Thanks for sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-14593957965023026762012-05-26T08:55:18.552-07:002012-05-26T08:55:18.552-07:00Thanks! This was a fun write so I'm thrilled y...Thanks! This was a fun write so I'm thrilled you enjoyed your stay. Thanks for the love!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-31065150963183834012012-05-26T07:41:16.537-07:002012-05-26T07:41:16.537-07:00I LOVE this story. I can picture it perfectly havi...I LOVE this story. I can picture it perfectly having two chocolate frolicking Labs myself.Ginahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04841767868797265391noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-56162466342554507162012-05-26T06:53:22.033-07:002012-05-26T06:53:22.033-07:00Beautifully done! I can't say that I've ev...Beautifully done! I can't say that I've ever written from the perspective of an animal before, and you did it so seamlessly. I really enjoyed the attention to details of the tree.angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14974137283220034062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-11255295955006534092012-05-25T19:50:20.841-07:002012-05-25T19:50:20.841-07:00Puppies at play, what is not to like? I love how t...Puppies at play, what is not to like? I love how their excitement comes through. I could almost see them running around.Waterfallhttp://waterfallmind.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-60952916207343285632012-05-25T16:28:38.061-07:002012-05-25T16:28:38.061-07:00Oh, to be a dog with truffles to smell. Can you im...Oh, to be a dog with truffles to smell. Can you imagine? How amazing they are to the human nose? Only loads more intense?<br /><br />I love the description of the hole in the roots of the pecan tree.Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407917830307384493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-38014247327657579632012-05-25T16:15:12.391-07:002012-05-25T16:15:12.391-07:00Thanks! I had a Lab Sadie. She was thoroughly disa...Thanks! I had a Lab Sadie. She was thoroughly disappointed she wasn't a lap dog and chewed the threshold off of the back door practically overnight. <br /><br />Puppies do the darndest things.<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-68632843327824685472012-05-25T15:59:25.626-07:002012-05-25T15:59:25.626-07:00This brought back some memories of our Lab Sandy, ...This brought back some memories of our Lab Sandy, who was always looking for some mischief to get her nose into. I could almost smell the freshly dug earth. Perfect!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-21337096286975570332012-05-25T15:37:39.769-07:002012-05-25T15:37:39.769-07:00Thanks!
All the bird dogs I've ever known exh...Thanks!<br /><br />All the bird dogs I've ever known exhibited that behavior and it's the only way I could think of to truly describe it.<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-15749823161761718362012-05-25T15:30:15.827-07:002012-05-25T15:30:15.827-07:00"Startled her to stillness" really stood..."Startled her to stillness" really stood out to me. The description is so rich throughout. Beautifully done!Staceyhttp://www.staceysmotheringmoments.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-24422951076127848162012-05-25T15:10:26.293-07:002012-05-25T15:10:26.293-07:00Thanks!
It was a line I played with. I wanted so...Thanks! <br /><br />It was a line I played with. I wanted something with a different flare, but not with a different voice. I'll give it a revisit.<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and providing feedback!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-80716337964042224552012-05-25T14:36:32.099-07:002012-05-25T14:36:32.099-07:00Love how the opening paragraph perfectly sets the ...Love how the opening paragraph perfectly sets the scene. <br /><br />"She let him alone then, able as she was to get into trouble of her own accord." - This sentence felt forced and awkward, unlike so much of the rest of the piece.Roxannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12330094142744544717noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-30204747305749788202012-05-25T14:23:49.132-07:002012-05-25T14:23:49.132-07:00Thanks! It was a challenge for me actually. I don&...Thanks! It was a challenge for me actually. I don't remember ever writing from an animal's perspective. I'm glad you stopped by. Thanks for sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.com