tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post5904133766756751328..comments2023-04-03T06:16:16.077-07:00Comments on Expressions of Talking Leaves: Podgy-Warble (WoE #11 Bubble & City Hall Challenge)Shelton Keys Dunninghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-79873119675108535112013-03-18T19:33:39.372-07:002013-03-18T19:33:39.372-07:00Thanks! I'll take sweet and full of portent. I...Thanks! I'll take sweet and full of portent. I'm pleased I was able to deliver the scene as it played out in my thoughts.<br /><br />I hope you enjoyed your visit. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-5818084209988118562013-03-18T17:40:22.305-07:002013-03-18T17:40:22.305-07:00So cute, but like others have pointed out, full of...So cute, but like others have pointed out, full of portent. And Lily's dismay over Podgy-warble is so sweet.Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407917830307384493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-84750598481355001322013-03-15T23:25:54.074-07:002013-03-15T23:25:54.074-07:00Thanks! It's my goal to keep that element of w...Thanks! It's my goal to keep that element of whimsy throughout (it wouldn't be a pixie story otherwise right?) even though there are some serious things coming down the pipeline. There has to be something to challenge them otherwise they won't grow as characters. :)<br /><br />I'm happy you enjoyed your stay. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-43533188850104600902013-03-15T11:05:40.118-07:002013-03-15T11:05:40.118-07:00I am so glad there are more Podgy-warbles to make ...I am so glad there are more Podgy-warbles to make Lily happy. And though this tale is full of fun and whimsy, you're building a great foundation for the conflict of the story: secrets and protection, Fetching and cooperation. I like it.angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14974137283220034062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-33484327671965209952013-03-13T20:12:59.132-07:002013-03-13T20:12:59.132-07:00Thanks! I'll take laughter no matter how mean....Thanks! I'll take laughter no matter how mean. :)<br /><br />I'm glad you enjoyed your visit. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-71608955237263935772013-03-13T20:04:54.556-07:002013-03-13T20:04:54.556-07:00Podgy-warble completely delights me. And I admit,...Podgy-warble completely delights me. And I admit, I laughed at "Podgy-warble's dead!" even though I know that's mean. Annabellehttp://glassoffancy.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-71111947837614454812013-03-13T15:05:42.752-07:002013-03-13T15:05:42.752-07:00Thanks! With only 500 words for real estate, I try...Thanks! With only 500 words for real estate, I try to keep the pace moving and the plot focused. (As it was I had to cut this scene down 300 words. Oops) <br /><br />You make an excellent point about dialogue tags. It was something I didn't catch with my edit. Thanks for keeping me honest!<br /><br />I'm pleased you enjoyed your visit. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-72745063452324279562013-03-13T14:59:44.126-07:002013-03-13T14:59:44.126-07:00Thanks! They're fun to write.
I hope you enjo...Thanks! They're fun to write.<br /><br />I hope you enjoyed your stay. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-42491990550350993192013-03-13T07:54:33.805-07:002013-03-13T07:54:33.805-07:00One of the things I always enjoy about your writin...One of the things I always enjoy about your writing: immediate conflict.<br /><br />“I don’t see what the problem is,” Pocker scratched his head as they gathered seeds in the farmer's meadow, “why is being a Fetcher a bad thing?”<br /><br />I know already that the heart of this short tale will revolve around Fetchers and what being a Fetcher means. <br /><br />Some concrit...There are a lot of characters here! The quick introductions can make it card to follow. i.e.: “Sellamina shot Pocker her withers-butterflies look and Sticky cringed instinctively. “Secrets are secrets, Pocker!” she hissed.” <br /><br />Who hissed? Sellamina or Sticky?<br /><br />great details throughout : “her wings darkening with her mood” !<br /><br />Love the ways the bubble interrupt the fight - what a great use of perspective! barbara @ de rebushttp://www.barbaragildea.com/fear-of-flying/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-25488790522750520322013-03-13T06:40:47.812-07:002013-03-13T06:40:47.812-07:00Every time you use these characters they're so...Every time you use these characters they're so cute. So charming.Kathleen Basihttp://www.kathleenbasi.com/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-5905304254206495562013-03-12T20:04:54.025-07:002013-03-12T20:04:54.025-07:00Thanks! I know right? A whole army of Podgy-warble...Thanks! I know right? A whole army of Podgy-warbles sounds like crazy fun to me too. <br /><br />As for the critique, you're right that the sentence seems ill-prepped. I promise to take care of that before I submit this for publication. Thanks for keeping me honest!<br /><br />I'm pleased you enjoy these scenes. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-58283590973185322942013-03-12T14:31:36.120-07:002013-03-12T14:31:36.120-07:00Podgy-warbles are very fun! I think I have more fu...Podgy-warbles are very fun! I think I have more fun with them than the pixies. I love this story and it makes me smile to read these little snippets!<br /><br /><br />One small item: "The fight between Sellamina and Pocker grew steadily louder, another threat that would need resolved for their protection." Did you leave a couple of words out by accident? TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-86130716852943270222013-03-12T13:56:31.393-07:002013-03-12T13:56:31.393-07:00Thanks! It's actually what I wanted to do when...Thanks! It's actually what I wanted to do when I saw the picture. A perfect sphere, with two reflections of a perfect sunrise...even though it's forever preserved in that photo, it must've popped. Something that beautiful destroyed. The more tender side of me wanted to cry too. And sweet Lily hasn't had much of an opportunity to shine so far, so there you have it!<br /><br />Innocence is treasured in our young, especially in how they handle new experiences. The beauty is you can never truly predict how they'll react. The sweet, sometimes bittersweet surprises of life.<br /><br />I'm happy you had a fun time. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-86639262317723446052013-03-12T13:46:11.029-07:002013-03-12T13:46:11.029-07:00I was thrilled to discover that the bubble was cal...I was thrilled to discover that the bubble was called Podgy-warble and grieved by sweet Lilly. I remember vividly my little boy crying as the bubbles popped and my speedy backpedalling about whether blow bubbles was a good idea! :) Very fun!Morganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02173810987391935584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-41033723349244060622013-03-11T18:43:59.111-07:002013-03-11T18:43:59.111-07:00Thanks! I think all bubbles need names that silly....Thanks! I think all bubbles need names that silly.<br /><br />I hope you enjoyed your stay. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8156955729401188147.post-48091240448158422602013-03-11T18:37:01.680-07:002013-03-11T18:37:01.680-07:00I just absolutely love Podgy-warble! And I cant w...I just absolutely love Podgy-warble! And I cant wait to hear moreof Sticky's adventures Reneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00955772837133239769noreply@blogger.com