There's a new format to my weekly addiction. The Write On Edge community is retiring the Tuesday-Friday link-up of Red Writing Hood in favor for a new Sun-Thurs writing prompt. We're at Week 1 of Write at the Merge. The standard word-limit is set at 500 and the prompt will reflect a "merging" of two ideas. This week, there is a song Past and Pending by the Shins (which you'll have to forgive me, but I found the lyrics disjointed. Something about love or pistols or a road...or an ancient torch?) and the word Wish.
Wish. I understood Wish.
The most wonderful thing about wishes is making them for others. Love is wanting the best for another.
I offer the following in response: A Future Waiting
“What think you of that one?” Colette abandoned her sweeping
to point towards a well-dressed gentleman leaning against a stall in the
marketplace.
The morning was still early, but there were crowds enough to
obscure him at first glance. Francesca dismissed the suggestion as she beat
dust from a hanging carpet. “His is a dangerous occupation and one of extreme
importance. If we were wed, who would support the fishmonger’s stall as well as
he?”
Colette clicked her teeth with disapproval, “Will you not
take your marriage prospects seriously? If I am forced to wait for you,
the eldest, I’ll die an old maid. I am near ten and seven and all my friends
have already entered engagements.”
“You are not so near ten and seven as you are near ten and six,
and only your ill-advised friends are so entangled. I think there is time yet
before we are forced to spirit you away to the garret.”
“You sound like Father,” her sister pouted.
“Worry not,” Francesca delivered another series of
well-measured strikes against the carpet, delivering another cloud of dust into
the air. “I daresay Father has his own mind as to whom I shall wed. A cleric, I
should think, or mayhap a soldier. He is fond of those who can prattle on with
superiority about dignity and duty.”
Her frown did not vanish. “And if the lanky monger-leaner is
the one Father has given his approval for?”
“Then I suppose you shall die an old maid,” she teased.
“I’ll not marry a man who slouches so. It is unseemly.”
“Well, I shan’t be as prejudiced as you, Fran. A rich man can love
as well as a poor one. I shall marry a wealthy man.”
“Yes, I suppose you shall. You are fair of face and your blonde
curls entice where my red offends.” Francesca agreed in a softer tone. Red-hair
was not a desired trait among the respected classes. A shop-girl, she long
abandoned the notion that a man of means would ask for her hand, but she still
wished the world for her sister. “You shall have a wealthy man indeed for your
husband. For your sake I hope he is also very foolish, for you deserve to be
showered with pretty presents daily.”
“That is a silly fancy to hope for, but I shall endeavor to
be gracious and accepting of such a lad.” Colette smiled and spun about her
broom, dancing like fiber on a drop-spindle. “You, my sweet sister, I shall
pity greatly, for you shall have a dull existence with a humdrum husband. You
are far too practical.”
“And you are much too delightful to be a spinster. I shall endeavor
to marry a nomad if I must in order to secure your happiness. Come, we’ve much
left to do before Father can open shop.” Francesca collected the carpet,
casting a furtive glance to the stall-leaner. For a moment, she wondered of
him, but turned before the thought took root.
You make the period-speak seem so simple when it utterly is not. You write the sisters in a way that makes me hope that they both find something that makes them happy, though Francesca doesn't even worry about that for herself.
ReplyDeleteThanks! Years and years of historical reenactment have paid off I guess. I'm fascinated by the way our language has evolved, in some cases devolved, from the time of the Norman-Saxon conflicts. I hope I didn't make it sound too archaic. That's the risk with any "period" piece.
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I really enjoyed this piece. You did a great job with it. would love to read more.
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DeleteI love the way you created the patter between the sisters, capturing the nuances of an earlier era without going too far into dialect. And I hope for big sis, too. Wish for her.
ReplyDeleteThanks! I'm glad the language flowed and wasn't too archaic. And Fran appreciates the wish. Truly, as does her author!
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DeleteIt is obvious that you know your history very well. I liked the banter between the sisters. It was clear that they love each other very much. This seems like a great beginning to an epic tale!
ReplyDeleteThanks! I'm an avid history nerd. There are so many treasures to be found in antique stores, and every piece has a story begging to be told. Adding the human element and making that story personal is exciting for me.
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Oh, this is the same discussion I'd have with my younger sister about everything. I didn't care to wear make-up, but she wanted to, so I had to ask to do it first. Everything was like that growing up. I'm even a red-head...
ReplyDeleteThanks! I like hearing when my reader can see herself in the characters I write. Even if it's only a glimpse. I hope it wasn't too eerie for you though!
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The banter between the sisters was perfect. But my favorite part was the glance at the end.
ReplyDeleteThanks! The slouching gentleman is important...I'm not sure how other than Fran felt the need to give him a second glance. We may see later.
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You have such a light touch with period dialogue, Shel. I envy it. I tend to suggest it, but I can't commit. Your sisters are lovely, and I imagine a long and complicated way to the altar for both of them :)
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Nice job! I always love to see what you do with these prompts. You often take such a different direction from me and do a wonderful job!
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